Spent a few days looking round online to see what authors say about revising a first draft. I’ve made a few notes and have started to outline the scenes as written.

Outline the book
Play the what-if game

Does an idea or scene really belong where you’ve put it, or would the piece be better if that element was cut? Could it be used elsewhere, or on another occasion?
Do events occur in the best order and are significant events given enough weight, or are they lost beneath less important things? If so, is that what you intended?
Does the middle sag anywhere?
Does the story unfold naturally with consistency and tension?
Does this scene matter?

Is it what you meant to say, really?
Have you found the best way to convey it?
Would a particular event really have happened that way?
Details and background information. Don’t info dump. Pace information through dialogue and narration.
Would a particular character definitely use that expression or turn of phrase?
Does this character appear all the way through the book,
Does this character still look and act the way he did at the beginning of the book?
Are my characters properly developed? Do they grow consistently throughout the book?
Are my characters likable, with strong goals and sufficient motivation?
Make sure all characters who come in contact with one another have some kind of relationship, whether good or bad.
Characters must have motivation for everything.
All characters react and act.
Each character has his or her own life.
How do characters react to setting

Does it read too slow, or too fast?
Overall, does the writing convey the right tone – does it create the mood you hoped for?f
If this scene introduces a new idea or new action, is it something that I remembered to follow through all the way to the end?
Have you followed your header, chapter, and quote scheme consistently?

climax- longest scene, twists, surprese, emotionally powerful
read it loud again



On Wednesday 5 November i finally finished the first draft in just over 51,000 words. It was basically just the plot with a few bits of dialogur and characterization thrown in.  Before I started revision i need to get a bit of distance betweeb me and the draft so that when I read it I will be doing so with fresh eyes.  So i started a free online course which lasts for 8 weeks. Lots of useful things – creating characters, the importance of detail, keeping a writer’s notebook, research and writing your own short story.  But after three weeks i thought “Well I’m doing the real thing.” So for the first time ever I’m dropping the course. No doubt it will give me nightnmares.

I can call myself poet and author

26/7/14 I’d been  quite happily putting off actually writing some prose, tinkering with the story board and thinking up excuses and putting off the actual work. Now last monday I started a free online course, Talk The Talk which should take 6 weeks, and on Tuesday attended a talk at Waterstones in Guildford about whether to use an agent or go the self publishing route. But before I went I sat down in the morning I sat down and used Dragon for about 600 words it converted into text, and by the time I’d made the corrections and added to the text, had written 1,000. I managed to do that 4 times last week. So i think now I can call myself poet and author.


6/7/14 Hugo Williams said “if you can’t write good poetry then you can’t write good prose.” I been writing poetry since I was thirty learning the craft – voice, lines, stanzas, how to make a good title, meter (although I’m only really bothered about this if the line doesn’t flow) and rhyme – the different forms and their qualities, and reading lots of poems. I’m eager to start writing some fiction. I’ve had a story in my mind for some years so I started to draft an outline which turned into an outline for four novels, which gives me something to aim for.  I say outline because I know that words have a way of taking things over and I’m sure that the characters I’ll be writing about will want some changes, and there’s the plot itself. The unexpected will happen. I’m all set to go. I have some Dragon software to turn my words into text and I’ve been dreaming about the book. But something is always holding me back from starting, illness (shingles took a month to get over), something on television (the World Cup, Wimbledon), family matters but mainly fear that the words won’t come and it’ll be rubbish.